It’s been a while since I’ve put up a poem. As usual, it’s pretty rough. I like a lot about it and I think I can make it work.
I’m almost done with my manuscript, but struggling to make a couple of poems tighter. AND I HATE writing cover letters. Oh, help!
Vinegar and Sugar
(the German word for please is bitte)
In my mother’s brain,
the area responsible for taste
has interchanged
with the area responsible
for memory
She does not ask me for “Vinegar sugar soup, bitte”
But when I make lentils
for dinner,
she slyly opens the pantry door
(as if her desire to have a secret makes her invisible),
takes out the bottle of white vinegar,
and pours it into the soup
Mom, it already has vinegar in it
I like a lot, she says
She moves on to sneak the sugar bowl from the cupboard
and dances teaspoon after teaspoon
into her vinegar soup
All my Oma really wanted to eat
when she reached her 90s
was Schokolade
She stashed it in drawers
and behind books,
wrapped it in cloth and kerchiefs
in her little room
where they put her
with her little window
high up on the hill
at the top of the small
German town where she lived
most of her life
and died her only death
Now my mother
wants only sweet and sour
around her
She forgets
that she hates soup
and soup with beans
and that all they had to eat during the war
was soup
and beans
and her father’s rabbits and rooster
So,
sour or sweet,
who am I to stop her, bitte?
I love this, my husband was stationed
In the Hunsruck mountains and we love revisiting the area and those wonderful tastes!
Danka for the fun post
You are a good daughter
Thanks so much, Melinda! I already can see how to edit this to make it a better poem and to do more of what I want.
It is helpful for me to have feedback. Danke to you too!!! I love input.
Katherine